Restaraunt Revisted

This might be the first of many updated drafts, or I might just let this be the only one because of how I changed it. All I did was change the line breaks to what I think are stronger places. It's like re-editing a film but keeping all the same shots. There's something incredibly fulfilling, fresh and fun about it. The original draft is first followed by the revised one:

Restaurant

Lesbians always sit in the corner
tables where I work.
It's a phenomenon I don't understand.
Families with children
gravitate towards the middle section.
The elderly don't care.
Neither do parties of teenagers.
Gay males sit against
the windows, but not in the corners.
Straight males don't like
booths secluded or small. Large parties
want everyone to see,
like straight guys. We sing
a birthday song for those who ask for it.
I only sing for the corners
and the windows. They are the ones
who ask for people.
The others sing for the cake and ask
for doggy bags.

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Restaurant

Lesbians always sit in the corner
tables where I work. It is
a phenomenon
I don't understand. Families with children
gravitate towards the middle section.
The elderly don't care. Neither
do parties of teenagers. Gay males
sit against the windows, but not in
the corners. Straight males don't like
booths secluded or small. Large
parties want everyone to see,
like straight guys. We sing
a birthday song for those who ask for it.
I only sing for the corners
and the windows. They are the ones
who ask for people. The others
sing for the cake and ask for doggy bags.